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I just did a few revisions but was hoping on revising it more and helping it become a better novel.

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Thanks a lot for your changes, they will help it become a better novel, except for the two quirks that are totally intended. If you leave those words as they are, I can accept the rest.

So. It was early winter, but the weather was still sunny and mild. I was walking
in the docks, as I was wont to do. The air was clear and I could see ships
in the docks, as I was accustomed to do. The air was clear and I could see ships
docking and leaving,
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I do like "wont" here https://www.merriam-webster.com/dictionary/wont It gives it a certain old feel. In fact, it means the same.

about. It was even steaming a little bit, because he's not actually
mechanical, you see, it's also fuel-powered ad some electrickal cables
mechanical, you see, it's also fuel-powered and has some electrical cables
to spark it to motion whenever it's needed. Or something like that. I
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Once again, "electrickal" is intended and is probably closer to the initial spelling of the word. The other is obviously an error, thanks for pointing it out.

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